#WeWriWa- Take Two
Last week was my first Weekend Warrior Writing challenge. I had such fun and enjoyed all the questions and comments about my snippet. Now it’s that time again so enjoy. If you like what you see or are curious, check out what the others are doing for their snippets at www.wewriwa.com. Below I’ve got another teasing 8.
Dane’s head snapped up. His cousin’s voice caused the she-wolf’s growl to increase like a freight train with no brakes. Her eyes flicked over his shoulders, her body going taut. Don’t do it. “Easy, sweetheart.” He kept his voice soft and crooning; hoping against hope that she wouldn’t make a move for his cousin. Tranqued by humans or taken down by a wolf in his human skin. Neither would be a pleasant option for her.
I think she will make a move. She seems to be that type of person that will go up against whoever or whatever. Nice 8!
Good catch Frank. She is a strong female
Doesn’t sound like she has good options!
LOL, it doesn’t seem like it.
Seems like a massacre is about to happen. I wish you would identify the characters to keep the reader informed. I was confused. Otherwise good eight and thanks.
Thanks Charmaine, I went back and I could see that.
Nice snippet.
Thanks Anne
Quite a situation they’re all in, tense! Great 8!
There’s a lot of tension in this scene 🙂
So happy you’ve joined in the fun, Michelle! I’m becoming a big fan of your writing! 🙂
Thanks Evelyn that means a lot. I did notice I repeated the phrase “He kept his voice/tone” from last week. I’ll need to play with that since it’s the first time I caught it.
Wow. It seems like there are no good options for anybody. Great snippet! 🙂
Thanks Beth
Intense! Options don’t seem the best. Can’t wait to find out more.
Thanks Karen
LOL- the freight train description is awesome.
~Summer
Thanks Summer
Okay, you’ve got me. I want more. Great job!
Thx. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
That was intense and it doesn’t seem like it’s going to end well :S
Thanks, just what I was aiming for
I am a total shifter groupie. Can’t wait to read more of this story. 🙂
Nice to meet a fellow groupie Gem.LOL
Really like this story. Can’t wait to see where it goes:)
Thx Eleri
Love this scene and these 8 really capture the tension! Well done!
Hi JA, thanks
A freight train with no brakes. Wonderful.
Nice simile–and I love the tension. You might consider, perhaps, breaking the paragraph up some–it’s pretty dense.
Thanks Caitlin, I’ve gotten some great feedback the last two weeks
Welcome back for WeWriWa. Great excerpt. Looking forward to reading what happens next
Thanks Heather. Its been fun seeing everyone’s snippets. I’m already thinking of what to use next week.
Hmm, she’s a toughie…I can see her making a move pretty quick! Lots of tension in the scene!
Thanks Millie
Wow! Nope, neither sound pleasant o.O Great tension. Enjoyed your 8!
Hey Karen. Thanks for stopping by
She definitely has to make a move.
Hi Linda. Good to see you again