Happy Friday. I’ve joined a group of awesome writers in Flash Fiction Friday. The challenge is to look at a picture posted and write a scene with just 100 words. Needless to say I chewed on this for a bit but here it goes. Picture first and then my 100.
She heard the gentle glide of the glass door opening despite the shower running. Keeping her head down, she ran the cloth over her body in hopes of finishing quickly.
“Keira, I’m sorry,” he murmured, coming close enough for the heat of his body to brush along hers.
Keira wanted to ignore him but her body reacted predictably when her husband stood near. She pulled the washcloth higher to hide her tightened nipples. “You hurt me, Gabe.”
Callused hands slid up to cup her aching breasts. “I’m sorry.” His whisper caressed her sensitive nape. “I love you, baby.”
“I know.”
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Only 100 words…and the words you chose were perfect to take me to their moment–a moment the pic only hints at. The last line, the simple ‘I know’ is killer. Very well done.
Thanks J.A. This was as hard as I expected but fun.
You packed all kinds of emotion in just 100. I really want to know what he did. Well done. 🙂
LOL, I have no idea. It just came to me and I vaguely thought maybe he said something as men are want to do when they were with friends and it hurt her feelings. The 100 took off from there.
“………close enough for the heat of his body to brush along hers.” There are a couple of great lines in here. Very descriptive and power packed. “whispered into her nape…” is another one I like alot. Thanks for a great first flash. What a wonderful premier:) xo
Thanks Muffy. Not afraid to admit it was VERY challenging 🙂 100 words max requires skill to convey the whole message of a pic
Damn! How did he hurt her? I surmise she has forgiven him. Your sensitive shower scene captured the emotions of your flash.
Thanks Pablo.:)
Beautiful and emotional! I wonder what he did to hurt her. Great flash 🙂
Thanks Doris, I think it was a careless comment.It danced around my head
We always hurt the characters we love, huh? Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for stopping to check my 100 🙂
How did he hurt her, and why? This flash opens up so many questions. Great first flash
I love that I stirred your curiosity Naomi
100 words was not enough for this piece, and I wish this was longer. Excellent piece!
🙂 Glad I had you intrigued.100 was not enough. LOL. very tricky
Full of emotion and tension, I want to know too what he did. She sees aroused by his closeness even though he had hurt her. Hmmm I loved this. Awesome flash!
Thx AuroraRose. It was fun 🙂
Beautifully written and very romantic, excellent. Welcome to the group Michelle
Hi Julez, everyone’s been so kind. Thanks for the feedback
Dang and Blast how a husband can do that to their wives lol Lovely flash Michelle. xx
I know right JP 🙂