It’s Sunday and that means its time for www.wewriwa.com Below I’ve continued with 8 sentences for my latest project. I’ve fast forwarded some and now Olivia actually shares information with Shane
“Why don’t we start with your name?” Bulging muscles strained the arms of his white tee as he folded them over a massive chest.
Olivia swallowed past the lump in her throat. “Olivia.” No last name necessary.
His firm chin hitched in her direction. “The kid yours?”
She jolted.
Great. I feel the tension.
Sounds very tense. Was it supposed to be “bulging muscles”? He does sound scary.
Tense exchange beautifully captured!
Short and tense. Drew me in and stressed me out!
ooh I love how you describe him. i’d be jolting too if being questioned by him! Love the subtle chemistry reaction. Can’t wait to read more!
I can totally see that happening and it pulled me right in. Great snippet. 🙂
Well he’s no nonsense all right. Very intense and intriguing snippet!
Goes straight for her vulnerable point, doesn’t he? I like him! 🙂
Has the kid been mentioned before?
Short and not so sweet. seriouly good eight. Thanks.
Seriously, that is.
Great tension…and a great set of arms is always so distracting.
Your dialogue is so natural. Wonderful snippet! 🙂
So easy to picture this. Great 8. 🙂
He doesn’t seem very friendly.