February the beautiful month of love 🙂 It’s also that time again. WEWRIWA! Go here to get a full list of authors sharing a snippet of their stories or WIP. http://www.wewriwa.com/
This is a snippet for #8Sunday from my WIP in my warlord series.(unedited) My hero is from a warrior race and recently he’s had cause to rethink everything he knew and expected about relationships with women.
Laughter peeled out in the outer court yard. His fellow Warlord, Balal, chased after the Raasa woman he’d recently taken as his mate. She raised her hands in a surrendering gesture, shaking her dark head back and forth while she smiled. Apparently his friend was not in a forgiving mood because Balal scooped the pretty Raasa in his arms and carried her toward the stairs of their home.
Pain flared in Argan’s heart as he turned away from the sight. The ache in his chest was a familiar one. Of late the sharp pains became routine when he witnessed his friends and their obvious love for the women in their lives. Before betrayal and treachery changed his life, Argan had believed he would find a nice woman from Kaban and make her his bride.
Now to work on the blurb since I’m half way though the story ;p
The entire snippet is very fluid and lovely, but that last paragraph … heartbreaking (in a good way)
Thx Jess. It’s hard to convey a depth of emotion in a male character without losing the alpha vibe but I think I struck the right note in this opening scene. We’ll see if I don’t rip it apart after a good read through when its done.
Aw, he’s lonely. Poor guy.
LOL, not for long Cara
You’ve taken us to a different time and place and suddenly shown us a man with a heart that beats in an unusual way from the others. Beautiful writing.
Thank you Charmaine 🙂
You keep breaking my heart – and that’s a good thing. Have fun with the blurb.
Fun, ha! I call it something else Victoria. LOL
Awww, it’s always hard to see others happily paired when you are so lonely. I feel for him. And hope he’ll still find that one woman. Great 8!
watching others in loves always creates a feeling of “I want that”. Glad it came through Jenna
Beautifully written. You find exactly the right note for his pain. Well done.
Good luck with the blurb (I loathe writing mine;).
Writing blurbs is so hard no matter how many blogs and self help sites I’ve read. LOL
Great job of pulling us into the world and creating an immediate connection with the character. Who knew warlords could be so lovable?
Thanks Alexis. I like an alpha hero with a soft center
Awww, I definitely feel for him and I want to keep reading until he gets his HEA. Great 8!
poor Argan, will he ever find happiness?