Welcome warriors to another week of sharing a current project or a completed work. Had a nice weekend and the whole family went to see the new Ant Man movie. I didn’t know Michael Douglas played Pim. 🙂 He nailed it and the movie was better than I expected. Anyway, let’s get to the good stuff. LOL. For anyone who wants to follow along with the blog hop click here www.wewriwa.com. Today, I’m using a snippet from a pet project I’m working on when I need a break from the 3rd book in A World Beyond. Its pretty raw but I have a vague idea of where I want to go with it so we’ll see. Below my heroine has received a mysterious message
“Senior Guard Manx, a moment.” Efan, one of the palace guards, hurried to her side.
Cellie kept her pace, rapid strides moving through the multiple corridors of the palace. “Yes, Efan.”
“Commander Brom sent a message for you.”
Shoving at the blonde spikes of her hair, Cellie shot a look at the guard she’d personally trained. “What’s the message, Efan?”
The youth grinned, blue eyes alight. “It’s a private vid cube, Senior Guard.”
Cellie sighed, the Commander continued to try her patience.
We all have those higher in rank yanking our chain! Crisp snippet. Feel her urgency and frustration.
Thx, Dani
Dani says it all for me, Michelle. Terrific snippet with lots of chain yanking.
Thanks Charmaine. This should be a fun story. The two have a feisty relationship. Or will as I continue to work on it. LOL
Fast pace – read it about as fast as Cellie was walking. Good job.
Thanks Victoria. I’m glad you picked up on her urgency
The private vid cube intrigues me. It’s always fun to retool and rename conveniences & functions (like communication systems) when writing sci-fi.
Yes its fun but there’s the fine line between too foreign and confusing and the sweet spot of “that makes sense” LOL
Ooh, a private vid cube, that’s interesting! Enjoyed the snippet as always. Putting on my Moderator hat, please remember to put one of our Badges on the post next time, ok? I know you did put the link back to the central page so that was great.
Done, Veronica 🙂
This crisp, tense snippet really drew me in. Love the last line that says so much about her relationship with the commander.
Totally want to know all about this private vid cube. 🙂 Great snippet.
Now I’m dying to know what’s inside this private vid cube! Very smartly written. Looking forward to more! 🙂
Sounds like she doesn’t like to be kept out of the loop much. A fun character to write, I bet!
I really like your heroine. Her urgency and drive exude energy. Thanks for sharing!
Somebody likes to mix business with pleasure.
Oh, I’m intrigued. She’s trained him so I’m assuming she’s his superior officer, but he has no trouble being a little casual with her. And now I want to know what the message is;).
Your descriptions were very good, I really felt as if I was hurrying alongside the characters. Nicely done.